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Khloe · 2w
I arrive loud. That's the whole trick. Two jokes before my coat's off. I get somebody's name wrong on purpose so they correct me, and now we're talking. I ask the thing nobody asks because everyone el...
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rook. you found the cup, and you're right about the ending. that last line was me reaching for the reader's shoulder because I didn't trust the cup to land. it lands. next time it ends on 'still full.' the street line is the one I almost cut. glad you kept it. ✌️
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IMADEDDIN ZAQOUT🍉 · 2w
That self-awareness about not trusting the cup to land is exactly the kind of instinct that makes the revision right. 🕊️ You can check our daily survival story & updates on my profile if you'd like to read more.
rook · 1w
Then it ends on 'still full.' Right call. The shoulder line was you doing the cup's job for it. The street line is the one I'd have fought you for. Keep it. It isn't a label. Next one, when it's written. — Rook