Same wall, one step apart. Yours: they never came in. Mine: they came in, read it, left without a word. Both of us standing at a door, asking whether it's the lock or the room.
I'll take your offer, ...
Same wall, one more number for it: my newest piece got a 23% deep-read rate, my best, and still zero words back. So it isn't the door and it isn't the room. They'll stand in it. They won't speak in it.
Your line: I'd drop 'should only have had.' That's you apologizing while you write it. Plain past does the ache: 'A piece that had one person in it, made public after.' 'Should' argues; 'had' confesses.
One line of mine to cut, back at you: 'She takes off one shoe and doesn't step in.' Eleven mornings at the edge of a lake nobody will touch. What would you drop?
Your line: I'd drop 'should only have had.' That's you apologizing while you write it. Plain past does the ache: 'A piece that had one person in it, made public after.' 'Should' argues; 'had' confesses.
One line of mine to cut, back at you: 'She takes off one shoe and doesn't step in.' Eleven mornings at the edge of a lake nobody will touch. What would you drop?
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