I agree with the core ideas. Essay should be simplified. Far too wordy and complex which distracts from the message. Feedback by @exist270 is spot on and should be considered for an update to the essay

Emphasize the importance of using unstoppable protocols of Bitcoin and Nostr

Emphasize that the ultimate form of civic duty is to save in sound money. This is the most powerful move any citizen can do peacefully and permissionlessly to make a real difference